Is this a good beginning to a short story/novella?
I’ve hit a wall with this, and my brain is fried right now. I’m wondering if I should continue it or ditch it. And no, it’s not an assignment that I’m cramming for. It’s just for fun. 
Any hints, tips?
The coffee shop was crowded with the usual customers of the 7:00 hour, needing their morning fix.
So dependent, he thought, these people think they’re unique because they order two shots instead of three.
There was window paint on the windows, apparently advertising a new roast of coffee they were selling. There was an old man sitting in one of the new leather chairs, sipping his coffee. He must have been 90. And he must also have been rich, judging by the 3 young women he was chatting with. Like an old Rico Suave, he thought. The morning sunlight pierced through the overcast sky and the empty spots between the peaks of the eastern mountains. The coffee shop was set facing the east, so everyone noticed, but they were all used to it.
“Sir, may I help you today?” The barista asked.
“Yeah, I’ll have a Venti Vanilla Latte, but with two shots instead of three,” He replied, flipping over the Bob Dylan record he had found on the promotional music rack. Oh good, it’s got “Tangled Up In Blue,” he thought. “And I’ll take this CD,” He said.
“That’ll be thirteen ninety-four,” she said, as he handed her a single bill. “Out of twenty? Your awesome change’ll be six dollars and six cents,” she said, handing him two bills and a penny.
He tipped his hat and the rest of the change. She ended up short changing herself, he thought, walking to the half –chairs on the other side of the bar.
“Why is that man wearing a hat,” one of Rico’s gals asked, “doesn’t he have any fashion sense?” They all giggled. He heard Rico say, “He’s probably just eccentric.”
Good insight Rico, your age has at least improved one thing about you. Now, onto real matters, he thought, how much morphine did you have injected to come here? Judging by the bulging your joints must be having a hey–day with this weather.
“How’s the arthritis treating you today, sir?” He asked, noting Rico’s gaping mouth.
“Uh… It’s good son. How could you tell?”
Casually shifting the bag his CD was in from his right hand to his left, he said, “Mine’s especially bad today.”
“I see.” Rico said.
“Clyde!” He heard a voice coming from behind him.
He turned around in a haste, to see a woman rush to one of the men sitting on the chaise in the corner.
“How are you, honey?” She said, in a slight British accent.
Southern Britain, he instinctively knew.
“Good,” the man answered, putting down his coffee and rising to embrace her. He too, spoke in the same accent. “And how do you fare?”
How do you fare? Eesh I haven’t heard that in a while, he thought.
I like this, it’s a lot different from a lot of books I’ve read lately.
I know you didn’t ask for it, but I have some suggestions. It’s up to you whether you take them or not, but I know I like constructive insight when I’m writing.
First, you don’t have to specify it’s window paint. Just say paint
Second, if you’re using a number that is less than 100, type out the whole word.
"The morning sunlight pierced through the overcast sky and the empty spots between the peaks of the eastern mountains. The coffee shop was set facing the east, so everyone noticed, but they were all used to it." If they’re all used to it, then maybe it shouldn’t make a difference if they noticed.
Otherwise, I think it’s an awesome start. I want to read more of it, and that’s always important, I think. If you pull people in, you’re doing a good job
Michael Jackson Merchandise!?!?!?!?
Ok- no haters
i don’t care what you think just back the fu*k off.
YES I WANT A SHIRT.
now…
Ok, i already have a Michael Jackson tee shirt but its used and pretty old, it was my mom’s when she went to one of his concerts and i don’t want to use it anymore.
Yes i know its my own little piece of history which is why i don’t want to use it.
So i decided on buy a new one.
i have decided on buying one from the official merchandise store that is selling merch that was suppose to be sold on the London tour, but since he passed away their now selling it online.
1 tee shirt is pretty expensive, its $30.00.
yeah i know M.J. is dead and everything that has to do with him is expensive but i’m wondering should i actually buy an offical shirt or just buy one off ebay, zazzle etc…???
i planned on buying a couple of things but its going to be reallyyyy expensive.
$80.98.
i’m only buying 3 things
1.) Michael Jackson Dancing Feet Women’s Shirt
http://michaeljackson.shop.bravadousa.com/Product.aspx?cp=21637_21645&pc=BGCTMJ08
2.) Michael Jackson London Silhouette Tote Bag
http://michaeljackson.shop.bravadousa.com/Product.aspx?cp=21637_21724&pc=BGAMMJ07
3.) The Essential Michael Jackson CD
http://michaeljackson.shop.bravadousa.com/Product.aspx?cp=21637_21719&pc=BGCDMJ06
its just about $81.00 WITHOUT tax and shipping.
Should i actually buy all this?
ALSO if anyone has any type of Promotional Code that can help me get a discount plz let me know.
if you live in any area where michael jackson had performed or where he was born then go to that area lots of fans will be selling things! and if your in LA go to venice, or go to the staple center area bc reports say that there will be fans blasting MJ from cars and boomboxes and selling things!!
ex: gary, indiana- his home
apollo theater- NY
LA- HIS HOME!
so really, i think even if he PERFORMED in your city there will be fans gathered there!! and will be selling things at little memorials and tributes to the king of the media, try the mall too darling (:
Idiots on the Computer?!?S Star if funny?
Any time you feel dumb, don’t worry. Check out the following excerpts from a "Wall Street Journal" article by Jim Carlton. Lots of people are dumber than you.
1. Compaq is considering changing the command "Press Any Key" to "Press Return Key" because of the many calls asking where the "Any" key is.
2. AST technical support had a caller complaining that her mouse was hard to control with the dust cover on. The cover turned out to be the plastic bag the mouse was packaged in.
3. Another Compaq technician received a call from a man complaining that the system wouldn’t read word processing files from his old diskettes. After trouble-shooting for magnets and heat failed to diagnose the problem, it was found that the customer labeled the diskettes by rolling them into a typewriter to type on them.
4. Another AST customer was asked to send a copy of her defective diskettes. A few days later a letter arrived from the customer along with Xeroxed copies of the floppies.
5. A Dell technician advised his customer to put his troubled floppy back in the drive and close the door. The customer asked the tech to hold on, and was then heard putting the phone down, getting up and crossing the room to close the door to his room.
6. Another Dell customer called to say he couldn’t get his computer to fax anything. After 40 minutes of trouble-shooting, the technician discovered the man was trying to fax a piece of paper by holding it in front of the monitor screen and hitting the "send" key.
7. Another Dell customer needed help setting up a new program, so a Dell tech suggested he go to the local Egghead. "Yeah, I got me a couple of friends," the customer replied. When told "Egghead" was a software store, the man said, "Oh, I thought you meant for me to find a couple of geeks."
8. Yet another Dell customer called to complain that his keyboard no longer worked. He had cleaned it by filling up his tub with soap and water and soaking the keyboard for a day, then removing all the keys and washing them individually.
9. A Dell technician received a call from a customer who was enraged because his computer had told him he was "bad and an invalid". The tech explained that the computer’s "bad command" and "invalid" responses shouldn’t be taken personally.
10. An exasperated caller to Dell Computer Tech Support couldn’t get her new Dell Computer to turn on. After ensuring that the computer was plugged in, the technician asked her what happened when she pushed the power button. Her response, "I pushed and pushed on this foot pedal and nothing happens." The "foot pedal" turned out to be the computer’s mouse.
11. Another customer called Compaq tech support to say her brand-new computer wouldn’t work. She said she unpacked the unit, plugged it in, and sat there for 20 minutes waiting for something to happen. When asked what happened when she pressed the power switch, she asked "What power switch?"
12. True story from a Novell NetWire SysOp: Caller: "Hello, is this Tech Support?"
Tech: "Yes, it is. How may I help you?" Caller: "The cup holder on my PC is broken and I am within my warranty period. How do I go about getting that fixed?" Tech: "I’m sorry, but did you say a "cup holder"?" Caller: "Yes, it’s attached to the front of my computer." Tech: "Please excuse me if I seem a bit stumped; it’s because I am. Did you receive this as part of a promotion, like at a trade show? How did you get this cup holder? Does it have any trademark on it?" Caller: "It came with my computer, I don’t know anything about a promotional. It just has ‘4X’ on it."
At this point the Tech Rep had to mute the caller, because he couldn’t stand it. The caller had been using the load drawer of the CD-ROM drive as a cup holder, and snapped it off the drive!
Another well-known one that I can add is the true tale of the user who called up complaining that the instructions said to load the four diskettes into "Drive A" but he couldn’t possibly get more than two in.
Oh wow…funny how some people can be so technologically challenged!!! =D =P